请问这样翻译正确吗？

随着...有专门的固定词组，with ...，
不断也可以说 more and more
这句话的主句是后半句我们的业务量上升，而不是前半句
你的翻译有些象机器翻译出来的，生硬语法也有些问题
正确的译法是：

With the increasingly improvement of our production capability, the volumn of our business is correspondently going up more and more.
（随着不断提高的我们的生产能力，我们业务量也相应不断上升）

这样，语法正确，用词不重复，词性多样，肯定比你的译法要好，呵呵

有点别扭！

Since the production is improved , the business is increased accordingly

with the increasing of our production capacity, our business volumn is also going up continuously

according to our ability of production on the increase , it's the same as our volumn of business.

建议改为：With the continuous increase of our production capacity, our volumn of business is gradually rising at the same time.

不对，首先，acroding to是“由于”的意思，表示“随着”应该使用伴随状语；其次，acroding to 后面不能跟句子（而且你的句子也不完整）;最后，你的主句意思不明确。

应该是这样：
With our ability of production increasing,our volumn is also on the increase .