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Nowadays, Internet is getting into people’s life and becoming more and more popular. Human being can't live a single day without the internet, in a society with the information technology highly developing, it make our life more splendid, and it plays an important role in our life; when we enjoy the pleasure of the net bringing to us, we should not neglect the harm it may bring us. Hackers will cause troubles to the Internet and even people’s life.
The widely use of the Internet brought a great convenient to us. Some school have already got involved in distance learning education.①CompuHigh, founded in 1994, bills itself as the world's first online high school.\ Since many people live apart from their friends, and can't meet each other often, OICQ becomes a chat tool. More and more people use online chat to communicate with friends. ②Reuter's Singapore electricity: The professional network think factory declares on September 3, NetValue2001 year using the Asian customer amount that the network instant message serves adds 57% on the original foundation.
In the network gives us the necessary help, but it also left us with a lot of problems. Many children indulge in excessive network, and the teachers and parents worry about it very much. ③In chutian news paper it’s reported that on the 17th of August on 2007, a university student died after surfing the internet for more than five hours. \ The hacker caused enormous losses. For example ④A 18 year-old Owen Thorn Walker, is said to have been the leader of a group of programmers that set up a bitnet that infected 1.3 million computers with the purpose of stealing credit cards and manipulating stock trades.
In conclusion, the Internet has bought many benefits to us from distance learning, online chat etc. However, it has brought a number of dangers. A number of attacks are run on the Internet for unsuspecting people. Furthermore, the problem of teenagers' addiction to the Internet can't be ignored. Searching on the Internet healthily, to get the knowledge we need, this is the biggest achievement we'll get.